Protoman X

[Lord Wraith]

Just a small note, if you're going to do a sound only text bubble. Try doing it a different shape from the others. All your spoken text bubbles are rounded so maybe use a regular rectangle for the sound only. Also try to put it in the corner of the frame as much as possible so it doesn't look like the characters are saying it. Another thing you could do would be to give it serrated edges to make it really stand out, and change it's filled colour to again something different from the spoken text bubbles.

[Darkfire Super Sonic]

Originally Posted by Wraith EXE

Just a small note, if you're going to do a sound only text bubble. Try doing it a different shape from the others. All your spoken text bubbles are rounded so maybe use a regular rectangle for the sound only. Also try to put it in the corner of the frame as much as possible so it doesn't look like the characters are saying it. Another thing you could do would be to give it serrated edges to make it really stand out, and change it's filled colour to again something different from the spoken text bubbles.

Awesome, thanks. I will remember that. What about the proportions? was there anything else wrong? Anyway, thanks for the advice. It will help me out.

[TAoR]

You've made it just a little too large.

[Enigma]

I think the comic's fine. You need improvement, but Inc. is a harsh place for comic makers. People here tend to have really high standards and judge based on what they think it's right. Close minded people are everywhere in the internet. Learned that a long time ago.

Anyways...Your new issue is huge!! Try to make it back to the way it was but with more panels, or if you feel the need to stretch it then don't stretch it too much. A whole panel took up the browser and that's just not right. One other thing, if you do recolors try not to make their colors so bright and eye-killing, if you do choose to recolor then at least make it look partly decent.

[RyuReiatsu]

Originally Posted by Enigma

I think the comic's fine. You need improvement, but Inc. is a harsh place for comic makers. People here tend to have really high standards and judge based on what they think it's right. Close minded people are everywhere in the internet. Learned that a long time ago.

Anyways...Your new issue is huge!! Try to make it back to the way it was but with more panels, or if you feel the need to stretch it then don't stretch it too much. A whole panel took up the browser and that's just not right. One other thing, if you do recolors try not to make their colors so bright and eye-killing, if you do choose to recolor then at least make it look partly decent.

First of all, this comic might be as unentertaining as most of them that have been posted over here. (Including mines, obviously.)
Harsh, I'll give you that though. But at least, most of them that have passed through crap became good.

Enigma...
The comic's effects and such are pretty tidy, I'll give him that.
But the dialogues and plot seriously SUCK. Plus most of the cast are plain recolors. Close minded people... CLOSE MINDED PEOPLE.
I'm sorry for being so close minded bro. I guess we're all guilty of that sin, disliking boring mediocre sprite comics .

[Darkfire Super Sonic]

Originally Posted by Enigma

I think the comic's fine. You need improvement, but Inc. is a harsh place for comic makers. People here tend to have really high standards and judge based on what they think it's right. Close minded people are everywhere in the internet. Learned that a long time ago.

Anyways...Your new issue is huge!! Try to make it back to the way it was but with more panels, or if you feel the need to stretch it then don't stretch it too much. A whole panel took up the browser and that's just not right. One other thing, if you do recolors try not to make their colors so bright and eye-killing, if you do choose to recolor then at least make it look partly decent.

Sorry about that. People kept saying it was too small. I will try to make the next issue not quite so big. Which recolor was too bright? Most of them have black armor. Protoman X's colors were based off of Zero's.

Originally Posted by RyuReiatsu

First of all, this comic might be as unentertaining as most of them that have been posted over here. (Including mines, obviously.)
Harsh, I'll give you that though. But at least, most of them that have passed through crap became good.

Enigma...
The comic's effects and such are pretty tidy, I'll give him that.
But the dialogues and plot seriously SUCK. Plus most of the cast are plain recolors. Close minded people... CLOSE MINDED PEOPLE.
I'm sorry for being so close minded bro. I guess we're all guilty of that sin, disliking boring mediocre sprite comics .

I am trying to improve the characters and the plot a little more. It's not that boring. I thought my humor has been improving. I understand the close-minded thing. It is something we are all guilty of, but I grow tired of people attacking my comic. I am doing what I can to improve it but nothing seems to make you people happy. And that is all I'm going to say about that. Last thing I want is another rant.

I would like to restate one thing... You people have ridiculous standards. Oh well. I have already argued that, and won't get into it again. Also, I like having characters who aren't apart of the main storyline, so I don't have to worry about what Capcom has set in stone so much. But, I have argued that too.

I know I said I wouldn't rant like my last one, but I think I did alright. I am not getting into arguements. I am not posting again until I finish more issues though. I am tired of arguing when I could be finishing more issues.

[Enigma]

If they are mediocre then help improve it. You can ask someone to start out completely with Custom made characters and the such. People aren't all good at spriting that they can make a character on the spot if they need one. If you have a problem with his comic then do what you usually do with a sprite you have a problem with, help him make it better. When it comes to sprite comics all you people seem to do is bitch and moan at the stuff you don't like, yet when it comes to sprites you tend to help people out. I don't know how the change happens but it does I suppose.

Anyway, here's an example of how the recolors could be less eye-blinding.



Notice how it went from really dark and bright colors being mixed to just bright colors being used? Recolors are never what people around here define as "original", but if you are going to use them then try to make them easy on the eyes.

[Lord Wraith]

If you're going to zoom, you should do it on only certain parts of the screen. I always found it best when working with sprite comics to keep the sprites at their normal size for the most part. But during action scenes or when you want to exaggerate a point or something. That's when you zoom, but keep your panels the same size. This way, we're not looking at a giant panel, but rather a specific part you're pointing out, make sense?

I finally read this whole comic so I could give you some real C+C, so here I go,

I like your concept. It's not bad, not amazingly original. But far from horrible. Better than say remaking a MMX game into a comic and re-dubbing the lines.

Though if you're going to have official characters, and the only one I noticed for now is Vile. Then they should have their canon personalities. Now I've never played an X game save Megaman Xtreme so I don't know Vile's personality, but he doesn't look like the kind of guy to forget what he was talking about.

Another thing, you seem to have a lot of light hearted easy going characters. Nobody really takes anything seriously. Now you're using this for comedy, but you could make your story more serious and still have comedic moments. Somebody else I think mentioned on how you're over using comedy. It's pretty true I think, but it's not bad. While the jokes aren't amazing, they at least leave you with a smirk. But as I said, I think you could actually develop a serious story. The comedy is another reason why your characters are stock and generic. Nobody is really developed. Though your comedy communicates some relations between characters, it doesn't really show us much. If I hadn't read your character bios, I would never know who anyone was or that Slasher and Ashley are in a relationship. You need to remember these things and show them to us in dialogue in the actually comic. Personally, I would drop Christine altogether. Having two sets of "twins" becomes redundant and really over doing the recolour issue which most spriters already have a bias against. Also on the note of Christine and Ashley, it might be just me. But I find it really hard to tell the two apart.

That's all I can think of so far. I'll keep my eye on this. I think you have potential. I know you're hatching your true plot, so hopefully my advice will help out.

Oh one last point, as good as effects are. Don't focus on them too much until you have a good story going. Over using effects can be just as bad as some of the other things I pointed out.

Good luck dude.

[RyuReiatsu]

Originally Posted by Enigma

If they are mediocre then help improve it. You can ask someone to start out completely with Custom made characters and the such. People aren't all good at spriting that they can make a character on the spot if they need one. If you have a problem with his comic then do what you usually do with a sprite you have a problem with, help him make it better. When it comes to sprite comics all you people seem to do is bitch and moan at the stuff you don't like, yet when it comes to sprites you tend to help people out. I don't know how the change happens but it does I suppose.

Anyway, here's an example of how the recolors could be less eye-blinding.



Notice how it went from really dark and bright colors being mixed to just bright colors being used? Recolors are never what people around here define as "original", but if you are going to use them then try to make them easy on the eyes.

Where have I been whining?
I merely stated facts. His comic is boring, but it looks pretty good. Minus the recolors. As Wraith said, he's got a lot of potential. He's starting out much better than 90% of everybody.

I'm a lazy guy, I wouldn't sprite for anyone... I can't even finish a single standing sprite to get it to my standards anyways.
I'll keep an eye on it.

EDIT: As for the humor, you'll have to work on it. Dialogues need to be less 'empty' in my opinion.

[Darkfire Super Sonic]

Chapter 2 Issue 2
Chapter 2 Issue 3
Chapter 2 Issue 4

OK. Here are some more. Now, to respond to the comments.

Originally Posted by Enigma

Anyway, here's an example of how the recolors could be less eye-blinding.

Notice how it went from really dark and bright colors being mixed to just bright colors being used? Recolors are never what people around here define as "original", but if you are going to use them then try to make them easy on the eyes.

Well, I don't really see what's wrong with Dinorex. The original colors are a mix of brights and darks. Your shades seem to be more X-treme style shading. I think I understand what you were going for though. He is a little darker than the original sprite. I don't know enough about sprites, if you can't tell already. I will try to take this into consideration. I am going to modify Ashley, because I know she has a very bright color scheme, and I probably should have just left her with the alternate colors I originally made for her. I decided against it because the colors were just too similar to the other.

To Wraith (sorry, that's a big post to quote, and this is going to be big enough already).

I do understand what you said about the whole twins thing. Personally, if I drop one, it will be one of the green guys, because even I am forgetting which one I made the buster guy, and which I made the weapon guy.
Thanks for the advice, like I said before, I am always trying to improve.

Vile forgot to ask Sigma what they were supposed to do next. Just so you know. I increased the size because people were saying the text was too small. It was the only way to make the text more readable.

to RyuReiatsu (hope that's spelled right)(still trying to save some room).

Anyway, I am trying to be a little bit more serious. I really should make it more serious, because the humor thing really isn't doing it for people. Although I won't remove it completely, since I do like to make people laugh a bit (even though my sense of humor is the weirdest in existence). Now, what do you mean by empty dialogue? I don't understand what that means (I know I sound like I'm stupid, but I'm not entirely out of it).

Anyway, thank you for the advice. It will help make this thing better. It must be getting a little better, because it seems like a lot more people are coming around here. I am glad people seem to be easing up a bit. More to come.

[Enigma]

I liked the new 3 issues. I don't know why but they look better. Quick piece of advice, make the speech bubles a bit smaller and the letters too. They're huge now, try to find the right dimensions that will be readeable and so that they don't take up half the panel up...

[RyuReiatsu]

Humor's still a bit so-so. But the Sonic the Hedgehog thing made me chuckle.

You might want to make better looking speech bubbles...
Make them white with a black outline, the usual thing. And what Enigma said about the size. It's too big.
I'll do with the recolors for now, as it's not that easy spriting whole lots of new characters...

Oh and what I meant by "empty dialogues" is like reading something like this:

- Hey.
- Yo!
- What's up?
- Ah, nothing much... And you?
- Well, not much either.

But it has gotten better. These 3 didn't feel that way.

[Darkfire Super Sonic]

Originally Posted by Enigma

I liked the new 3 issues. I don't know why but they look better. Quick piece of advice, make the speech bubles a bit smaller and the letters too. They're huge now, try to find the right dimensions that will be readeable and so that they don't take up half the panel up...

Thanks. I will try to adjust the text a bit more. I used smaller text in the beginning, but people said it was too small. I will try to find a medium somewhere. I am trying not to concentrate on the humor so much. Just a quick joke here and there. I am trying to concentrate on building a bit more of a story.

Originally Posted by RyuReiatsu

Humor's still a bit so-so. But the Sonic the Hedgehog thing made me chuckle.

You might want to make better looking speech bubbles...
Make them white with a black outline, the usual thing. And what Enigma said about the size. It's too big.
I'll do with the recolors for now, as it's not that easy spriting whole lots of new characters...

Oh and what I meant by "empty dialogues" is like reading something like this:

But it has gotten better. These 3 didn't feel that way.

Well. The gray seems to work a bit better. I couldn't really get the shape right if I made two colors. And the size. I will try to work on it. It is difficult to make the text as is. I will have more room if I make it smaller.But, like I said before, people said it was too small before. Now it's too large. AT LAST! I got a laugh (or close) out of someone! Doesn't Slash Beast look a little like Mecha Sonic, sorta? Yeah, I need to shut up now.

Thanks for the advice. At least I know I'm improving. It went from being horrible to being about acceptable. I'm happy with that, but I am going to try and make it better. No such thing as perfect! Unless you're me! (just kidding, really).

[RyuReiatsu]

Haha, your enthusiastic attitude made me laugh.
I look forward to seeing the progress you'll do.

[Enigma]

Well Ryu, let's see you do a sprite comic to your own standards. That would make me laugh, but no I'm kidding.

[Darkfire Super Sonic]

Chapter 2 Issue 5
Chapter 2 Issue 6
Chapter 2 Issue 7

Here are some more. Enjoy. You know the drill. Criticism to help me improve, enjoy the weird humor (although I don't think I put in much. Maybe one or two jokes at most), etc.

So, yeah.

[RyuReiatsu]

Originally Posted by Enigma

Well Ryu, let's see you do a sprite comic to your own standards. That would make me laugh, but no I'm kidding.

You're really on my case huh? He's improving and I loved these 3 last ones.
If you really want to pickup a fight, go on for somebody else. Not like I'll start a comic specifically for you or something. I'm more of a novel-reading guy anyways. Plus as I've said, mines were horrible too. Go look up my first post. In any case, you're going nowhere so get off my balls.

And I'm picky, yeah. What's so wrong with having pretty high standards? I've read the issues you've said that 'definitely gave you a laugh' and frankly speaking. I still only chuckled at the parts I've mentioned.

On-topic:
Lol! The Vile-looking guy's a genius...
I love Slash Beast's nickname, seriously . I think the fight between Beast & Dragoon was pretty short though. But it doesn't matter.

Good job! What's left is making the speech bubbles smaller, with a smaller font size and you're good to go. Oh and when they're white with a black border. It always looks better.

[Darkfire Super Sonic]

Originally Posted by RyuReiatsu

You're really on my case huh? He's improving and I loved these 3 last ones.
If you really want to pickup a fight, go on for somebody else. Not like I'll start a comic specifically for you or something. I'm more of a novel-reading guy anyways. Plus as I've said, mines were horrible too. Go look up my first post. In any case, you're going nowhere so get off my balls.

And I'm picky, yeah. What's so wrong with having pretty high standards? I've read the issues you've said that 'definitely gave you a laugh' and frankly speaking. I still only chuckled at the parts I've mentioned.

On-topic:
Lol! The Vile-looking guy's a genius...
I love Slash Beast's nickname, seriously . I think the fight between Beast & Dragoon was pretty short though. But it doesn't matter.

Good job! What's left is making the speech bubbles smaller, with a smaller font size and you're good to go. Oh and when they're white with a black border. It always looks better.

Hey now. I don't want to make people fight over me. Or do I? ANYWAY! I didn't want a long drawn out battle when there were two different battles going on. Plus, the maverick hunters were on their way, and I don't want them to see the colonel yet, and I would have had to make it a long train, or at least put them on the wrong train (that would suck). As for the size. The last issue had the smallest size text I can make. It should be about 8. That's the lowest I can go. I may decide to give beast and Dragoon (Magmoor as I have him named) a rematch, but beast will be weaker as you will see within the next few issues.

[RyuReiatsu]

Originally Posted by darkfire super sonic

Hey now. I don't want to make people fight over me. Or do I? ANYWAY! I didn't want a long drawn out battle when there were two different battles going on. Plus, the maverick hunters were on their way, and I don't want them to see the colonel yet, and I would have had to make it a long train, or at least put them on the wrong train (that would suck). As for the size. The last issue had the smallest size text I can make. It should be about 8. That's the lowest I can go. I may decide to give beast and Dragoon (Magmoor as I have him named) a rematch, but beast will be weaker as you will see within the next few issues.

I must've been sleepy, sorry. The last issue's bubbles & font size are good. I don't get how I haven't noticed... I think that I looked at the one before the last.
But then again, the bubbles are at times way too big for nothing, leaving a whole lot of space. You could save a lot of it.

[Darkfire Super Sonic]

Chapter 2 Issue 8
Chapter 2 Issue 9
Chapter 2 Issue 10
Chapter 2 Issue 11

Well. Here are more. Iris Customs by maverick Hunter Iris. I had no idea I was ever going to go this route. This deviated from every plan I had in the beginning of this thing. Oh well. Better plot this way anyway (I hope). Anyway, also got credit for Iris sprites in the first post in the thread too.

Originally Posted by RyuReiatsu

I must've been sleepy, sorry. The last issue's bubbles & font size are good. I don't get how I haven't noticed... I think that I looked at the one before the last.
But then again, the bubbles are at times way too big for nothing, leaving a whole lot of space. You could save a lot of it.

I am glad you seem to be enjoying the comic. Well. I am trying to get the size of the bubbles better. I put them in and then put the text in. I have a bad habit of overestimating the size I need. Oh well. I am definitely trying to get the size of the bubbles better. I just have to keep practicing.

Practice makes perfect. (need to shut up now) Perfect such as me! (DAMMIT! Oh well, I tried).