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this is my first time writing here, so there will most likely be many mistakes....
This story takes place 40 years after Megaman ZX,
and since Megaman ZX: Advent hasn't hit the states yet, it technically hasn't happened in my story :D
Chapter 1: The Prophecy
Episode 0: Prolouge
Paul whistled, as he walked down the hallway. He checked the wing one last time, before he returned to his post. It had been a dull night. Of course, every night was a dull night in the Cloud City Museum. Crime is at the lowest here, and there hasn't been a maverick raid in over 40 years. Paul decided to get a snack, and he set up the vid screen to link to his Pocket Pad. As he left the snack machine, he checked his Pocket Pad, there was a strange sillouette in the Ancient Studies wing. Paul blinked and the figure was gone. "That's impossible," Paul thought. "The alarms would have gone off if someone entered the building. Still...." Paul thought as he grabbed his Taser. Suddenly a huge bolt of lightning struck just outside the museum, and the resulting thunder caused Paul to jump. Suddenly his Pocket Pad went off.
It had a humanoid reading from the Ancient Studies wing. "No way, I was just there," he complained. "probably just some kids playing a prank". As he got there, someone stood, looking at what seemed to be an empty display case.
The person who Paul couldn't see, due to his heavy coat and big hat, was of a very large build. "E-excuse me," Paul Stuttered "Y-you can't be here now. But the museum will be open tommorrow." The figure mearly stood there, "where...." he spoke, almost in a whisper "...is it?". "Um Excuse me," Paul spoke... "Where is what?" Paul was beginning to get nervous, and he started inching toward the alarm. "Where is the Prophecy of Arcadia?"
"Um....," started Paul, trying to stall until he could reach the Alarm. "The transporters bringing it, it should be here by tommorrow..." Paul was almost there, just a few more feet.... "Hmm... a transporter eh? Just like all that time ago...!" The stranger noticed Paul inching for the Alarm "Oh, I can't let you tell anyone about my little 'visit' " The Strangers hands began to glow and he pointed at Paul. His hands shot a lightning bolt that struck a hole straight through Paul. "...*gasp*..." Paul collapsed on the floor, he had a glazed look in his eye... "I guess we'll have to wait for the little transporter then...." Guahahahahahahahahaha! In a flash, he was gone.
End Episode 1
I see a lot of grammer mistakes, but it seems kinda fun. Good job on your first fic. ^_^
really, could you point out where exactly Aen?
and thanks
Chapter 1: The Prophecy
Episode 0: Prolouge
Paul whistled, as he walked down the hallway,(There shoulod be a period here, not a comma.) (H)e checked the wing one last time, before he returned to his post. It had been a dull night,(There shoulod be a period here, not a comma.) (O)of course, every night was a dull night in the Cloud City Museum. Crime is at the lowest here, and there hasn't been a maverick raid in over 40 years. Paul decided to get a snack, and he set up the vid screen to link to his Pocket Pad. As he left the snack machine, he checked his Pocket Pad, there was a strange sillouette in the Ancient Studies wing. Paul blinked and the figure was gone. "That's impossible," Paul thought(Period) "The alarms would have gone off if someone entered the building. Still...." Paul thought as he grabbed his Taser. Suddenly a huge bolt of lightning struck just outside the museum, and the resulting thunder caused Paul to jump. Suddenly his Pocket Pad went off.
It had a humanoid reading from the Ancient Studies wing. "No way, I was just there(Comma)" he complained,(There shoulod be a period here, not a comma.) "probably just some kids playing a prank". As he got there, someone stood, looking at what seemed to be an empty display case.
The person, (No comma) who Paul couldn't see, due to his heavy coat and big hat, was of a very large build. "E-excuse me," Paul Stuttered "Y-you can't be here now. But the museum will be open tommorrow." The figure mearly stood there, (Period, not comma) "where...." (H)he spoke, almost in a whisper "...is it?".(Don't put a period after a quote) "Um Excuse me?(Comma, not Q.M.)" Paul spoke... "Where is what?" Paul was beginning to get nervous, and he started inching toward the alarm. "Where is the Prophecy of Arcadia?"
"Um....," started Paul, trying to stall until he could reach the Alarm,(Period, not comma) "The transporters bringing it, it should be here by tommorrow..." Paul was almost there, just a few more feet.... "Hmm... a transporter eh? Just like all that time ago...!" The stranger noticed Paul inching for the Alarm "Oh, I can't let you tell anyone about my little 'visit' " The Strangers hands began to glow and he pointed at Paul. His hands shot a lightning bolt that struck a hole straight through Paul. "...*gasp*..." Paul collapsed on the floor, he had a glazed look in his eye... "I guess we'll have to wait for the little transporter then...." Guahahahahahahahahaha! In a flash, he was gone.
End Episode 1
There's a bunch more, but I'm to lazy to look for them.
thanx, I'll fix them right away :D
Fixed
I updated yesterday but my computer kicked me off :(
so anyway heres teh next part:
Chapter 1: Prophecy
Episode 1: Max
*Mission Complete*
Max's watch went off.
"Yes," he thought, "300 more E-Crystals!"
Max was 14 years old, and, as of two months ago, a transporter. When he was six years old, his parents had been brutally murdered, right in front of him. For a while, he lived alone, drifting from street to street. Then one day, he met Vent and Aile (the current presidents of Giro Express). They gave him a home, and even gave him a job. Life was good for Max.
*Incoming Trasmission*
"who's the caller?" Max asked.
*Vent- Co President of Gi-"
"yeah yeah, I know, put it through"
A sudden hologram of a Man, some 50 years old, with long silver hair, appeared on Max's wrist.
"Max!, I need you to make a delivery for me, over to Cloud City, it's ve-" Suddenly Vent was cut off
"CLOUD CITY!!?!?" Max shouted, alerting the citizens around him. "That's like 5 miles away!" "yeah, I know Max, but everybody else is busy."
"Can I take the bike then?" Max asked hopefully "No Max, you're not ready to drive it yet." Vent said sternly. "So why shoud I do this mission?" Max asked in in irritated voice. "Because," Vent said "your getting paid 1000 E-Crystals to deliver it."
"1000 E- Crystal?!?" A sudden voice called out, "Oops.."
".. who in the wor-" Max turned around, before he was suddenly tackled.
"Max! Max!, What's going on??" Vent tried to move his hologram to get a better view.
"...Can't... Breathe..."
End Episode 1
Hmm! Good job this time! I didn't see any major errors, and it's morning where I am, so good job!
Thanx alot, I'll see If I can post the next episode today :D
Here we go:
Chapter 1: Prophecy
Episode 2: Nina
Nina had been walking down the street, drinking a soda, when she noticed Max talking to Vent on his vid-Watch. She put her soda down, and silently crept behind Max, ready to leap.
"...1000 E-crystals to deliver it."
"1000 E-crystals?!?" Nina yelled, "Oops." Her stealth gone, Nina leaped at Max.
"...who in the wor-" Max hit the ground with a "Thud!". "Perfect," thought Nina, "I still got it." Nina had been doing this for years, in fact, she still remembered the first time she met Max....
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Nina was six years old when Max moved next door. He was quiet, and quite unlike the kids she had known at that time.
"Mommy, who's that?" Nina had asked as she watched Max exit the car.
"That's Max, he's gonna be living next door from now on" Said Nina's mom.
"He looks sad" Nina said.
" Well maybe you can cheer him up" Her mom said with a smile. "why don't you go say hello?"
Max had just been led to his room by Aile, when Vent entered and said "Max, you have a visitor." Max turned around and was suprised to see no one there "Where are they?" "I don't know," Vent said, "she was just here, hmmm... Come on Aile, lets go look for her." Max turned around to continue surveying his room when suddenly... "AHHHHHHH!" He got tackled and landed on the floor hard. "Gotcha! HA HA!" Laughed Nina, and, for the first time since he arrived, he smiled.
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"yeah..." thought Nina "that was fun..."
"....Can't.... Breath....." Choked Max.
"Oops, sorry 'bout that" Said Nina, as she let go of his neck....
End Episode
Looks decent, but separate your chapters by using a skill called paragraphing.
Text walls aren't good.
that was just to show the time difference.... awww forget... anyway, thanks for the C+C guys :D
Yep, too bad I left My episodes..... at school, in my locker.... :( update on monday guys :D
It took a while to get this one:
Chapter 1: Prophecy
Episode 3: Mission Start!
"So Max, where are you going?" Nina asked
"Cloud City" Max replied, still catching his breath.
"Ooh, Cloud City" Nina said with awe, "Can I come?"
"No Nina, you know the rules, only transporters may travel out of the range of their home town."
"FINE!," Nina snapped, and she walked off.
"Girls.... you can never understand them." Max sat down at the bench "Might as well catch the morning news...." Max put on some glasses and said "Computer, access the Cloud City Morning News for today please."
*Processsing*
Max took out a special set of headphones and attached them too his Vid-Watch.
"Welcome to the CCMN broadcast," Said the announcer, "The Cloud City Museum is getting a new addition, and it should be delivered sometime this week. This museum is world to some of the most amazing artifacts ever uncovered, such as the ProtoShield* apparently used by some ancient Reploid. And the shell of an ancient robot, which from our researchers was named, Feferis**. Which brings us to our latest news, last night was the first murder in Cloud City history, Paul Maver, age 32 was found dead, outside the museum, after apparently struck by lightning."
"..What? Computer! give me a Vid feed.
*Processing*Said the computer
*Welcome to the Cloud City virtual tour, updated every 24 hours.
Please choose your Destination*
"Cloud City Museum"
*Accessing*
Suddenly, the world around Max dissapeared, replaced by a Virtual grid.
The grid changed, until Max appeared in front of the Cloud City Museum. Of course, he wasn't really there, the VR technology in his glasses alloud him to move around as if he was really there.
"Let's see.." Said Max, "they said the body was found out side the museum....ah! Bingo!." Max saw a static cube, patrolled by two VirtuaMets.
"ah this'll be easy..."
Max walked up to the Met's
*IDENTIFY* Said one of the mets.
At this point Max activated his Vid Watch, and a holo screen appeared. Max typed in a few codes.
*Activating H4K.EXE* said his vid watch
The Met's suddenly seemed as if they zoned out.
*HIGH LEVEL COMMANDER, WELCOME. YOU NOW HAVE ACCESS TO THE CRIME SCENE.* Said the Met, as they both dissapeared, along with the Static Cube. In it's place, was the body of Paul Maver, a huge hole right where his stomach should be. "That don't look like a Lighting strike to me.....Computer, take a picture of this. Then execute, the return program
*Executing*
As Max stood up, he took off his glasses, and put the headphones back in his pocket. Max walked a few blocks, and entered a room. As he got to the transerver, he said "TransPod, Mission Select, delivery to Cloud City."
*Mission Start* said the Transerver, and his Vid-Watch simultaniously.
As Max left the city, a gaurd stopped him. "Where do you think you're going?"
"No worries, I'm a Transporter." Said Max, as he showed the Gaurd his I.D.
"Ah, just like the other one.You're good to go" Said the Gaurd.
"Other one?" Max said to himself.
"It's about time you got here" said a voice.
"Who's there?" said Max, looking around, til he saw a sillouete leaning against a tree."
"It's me ya moron." Said Nina.
"What the heck are you doing here?" Said Max, "Only certified trans-"
"-porters are aloud out side the city." Nina finished his sentance."That's just it, I went and got a job for Giro Express, and now I'm working with you."
"AWWWW MAN!!"
END OF EPISODE
END OF CHAPTER
*Protoshield- we should all know that this was protomans sheild.
**Feferis- of course there is a translation problem between generations (this is Fefnir people)
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