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Zackval
13-05-06, 16:46
http://img331.imageshack.us/img331/5584/19gk.png (http://imageshack.us) here is my first comic:g-Rolleyes:
lordmetroid
13-05-06, 18:00
Bad things:
1. Character introducing a comic.
2. Bad speech bubbles.
3. Bad backgrounds.
4. The sudden apperance of Bass.
5. What happened in the 3rd panel?
6. What happened in the last panel?
7. Why is there a free-floating dot in the 1st panel?
Daemonseele
13-05-06, 18:10
Bad things:
1. Character introducing a comic.
2. Bad speech bubbles.
3. Bad backgrounds.
4. The sudden apperance of Bass.
5. What happened in the 3rd panel?
6. What happened in the last panel?
7. Why is there a free-floating dot in the 1st panel?
Lord Metroid pretty much summed up what I was gong to say, except for the dot thing; I didn't notice it until he mentioned it.
Hobo
13-05-06, 18:31
About the second panel, what's going on? He just jumps and looks at you, O.o.
lordmetroid
13-05-06, 18:48
About the second panel, what's going on? He just jumps and looks at you, O.o.
Yeah, that was weird.
Oh, and on a side note, SC, my name has no space. Just "LordMetroid".
Gollon
13-05-06, 19:33
I concur with previous statements afforementioned in column B! I'm a demycrat!
Dead Eye
19-05-06, 16:01
Okay....LordMetroid pretty much summed up everything. There are some spelling errors to. Don't have characters just randomly do things. Have some kind of explanation. Overall, this is a very bad comic. Read, How not to make a comic, then get back to the comic.
HZ
20-05-06, 03:18
ok....... i would say LOLJOOSUXORZ but thats not nice lordmetroid forget a few things: in #2 bass is kinda floating, WHERE THE HELL IS VINCENT?!,
omg the red is making my eyes bleed, why the hell is megaman using slash claw thing for no reason,why does it link to imageshack when you click it?,
im guessing you avatar is vincent.....no it makes my eyes bleed...eek a gawd awful recoulour!
Mikado
02-06-06, 19:27
Okay we knowed that it's not the best comic hunter zero, but what you're doing is confronting him, the lordmetriod says it is the good way. Becouse of that sort confronts a lot of beginner spriters stopped spriting; when some of them had a good potential.