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Going down Jakob's Ladder all Zero could think about were the events that just occured and the lose of his friend Axl.
"I could've reacted quicker...I...Should've acted quicker."said angrily Zero.
"Zero calm down. There's nothing you could have done."said X.
"X don't you care care that Axl's gone?"replied Zero.
"I do Zero it's just that if you keep acting that way your're going to do exactly what Sigma wanted."answered X
"There has to be someway to save him...someway to go back to the event"said Zero without acknowledging X
"Zero don't you understand there's nothing you can do now."responded X
"No there has to be X. You haven't experienced lose like I have."said Zero.
"Maybe you're right but that's no reason to act like this"says X. All the while Zero was pondering a thought in his head.
"That might work it has to."added Zero.
"Zero what are you talking about?" said X quizzically. But before he knew it the elevator hit the ground and Zero was off leaving X in the dust. Still wondering what he was talking about.
Just for the people who didn't know Axl dies in X 8.
Axl did NOT die in X8.
Gosh,please people,it said. Axl was damaged,but he is okay.
Fluttershy
05-10-06, 01:16
1) Not necessarily, he is damaged yes, but I remember hearing in the cutscene that he'll make it.
2) I thought it was X who went hysterrical in the cutscene?
3) Good writing, keep it up.
Outposted...
Zero being Hysteric fits better with the plot and I didn't really pay attention to the ending of X8.
As far as I can remember X or Zero say I can't beleive hes gone in on of the endings. And good job with the writing Zero.
The Walrus
05-10-06, 20:02
How could axl be dead if he's in CM which takes place after X8 as far as i know?
Well you now what Taor I have no idea.
After running acouple miles Zero stops
"Alia are you there do you read me?"says Zero.
"Damn I'm out of range for the comlink. Great it looks like I have to run." says Zero in his head.
After 30 minutes of running Zero finally reaches the Hunter Base.
"State your business here."says the Reploid.
"My name's Zero and I'm the leader of the special operations Zero unit.
"Z..Zero I'm sorry to keep you waiting head right in."replies the gaurd. Zero sprints inside the Hunter Base witout responding and finds Alia right away.
"Alia I need to find a reploid."says Zero.
"Sure..wait where's X and Axl?"says Alia confused.
"X is back at Jakob's Ladder and Axl he he couldn't make it" answred Zero quietly.
"I'm so sorry Zero and who is this reploid you're looking for?"responded Alia
"I'm looking for another tech reploid like Middy and Techno."stated Zero.
"Middy? Ah I remember who your talking about he's the reploid that helped you in the one mission were X had to go into the computer right?"replied Alia.
"Yes I am"added Zero.
"Ok hold."said Alia. Zero waits impatiently while tapping his foot.
"Got one a reploid name Cy and he's currently working on the field."Stated Alia.
"Well where is He?"Questioned Zero.
"He's in anewly found underground lab near where you were found. It's assumed to have information on you and who made you Zero."says Alia.
"Ok Alia but can you teleport me nearby?" Asked Zero.
"Sure but why are you doing this?"says Alia.
"For a friend."replied Zero. And with that he went off to find Cy.
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For all of you who don't know Middy and Techno were two tech reploids in megaman Xtreme.
Type-BLUES.EXE
06-10-06, 00:58
It's not bad, but you're missing out a whole load of commas.
for example:
"Ok, Alia, but can you teleport me nearby?"
putting in commas generally makes things easier to read, IMO.
After landing nearby Zero take a looks around for the underground lab.
"So this is where they found me"says Zero to himself. Then after looking around for a bit he finds a small opening near a mountain.
Zero says in his head."No wonder why they couldn't find it early it's cleverly hidden in the mountain as part of the structure."
Zero enters the place cautiously not knowing what to expect. Then after walking through the cave a bit a hologram filckers on and a picture of an old man wearing a lab coat appears.
"Who are you?"asks Zero.
"My name is Dr.Albert Wily and I am your creator. I designed you to destroy the Earth after I died, but as I can see know Sigma has stopped that by transferring the maverick virus to himself."Says The Old Man.
"I..I don't believe you"replied Zero.
"Don't you remember those dreams you had in the Repliforce crisis?"states Wily.
"H..how do you know about that I never told anyone bout it."Asked the blonde hair reploid.
"Zero let me remake the virus and then you will become the ultimate reploid like I intended."says Wily.
"I won't allow you to use me to destroy the world even if you did create me!"responds Zero
"Fine then I'll just have to destroy you! Come forth my newest creation!"Shout Wily.
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I couldn't update due to a soccer tournament and Blues Soul I have a problem with not putting enough commas.
Well In some parts you switch from present to past tense.Like when you say "Shout Wily." It should be shouted Wily.Or shouts Wily. And you change from calling Zero, Zero to the blonde haired Reploid.
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